Okay not “Ok.”
One of my most favorite things is the rain.
I was jumping around in the puddles in my shoes, singing “Open the flood gates of Heaven! Let it rain!” as it continued to rain harder.
When I got back to my room, I was dripping little puddles on my floor. I emptied everything out of my back pack, and the only things wet were a receipt and the corners of a journal! (Dude, target knows how to hook a person up.)
My shoes looked horrible too. They were already dirty, now it looked like I bought them gray. (I’m not even sure I’m the one that bought them….)
So I threw everything in the washer and drying, and they came out looking like they did before I jumped in any puddles. I, on the other hand, was freezing. I threw on a sweater, and began to clean up the rest of my dirty room.
(Ignore the fact that I just stated I’m cold so I’m a wearing a sweater, but now I’m also in shorts. I think it’s a Michigan thing.)
The day was a lot of fun. I was wet for nearly all of it. I was definitely soaking wet at the end of it. Although, I did not spare a friend of mine from ending up the same way. A full out water war happened. I was talking to a few other friends, and jokingly said, “Wanna hug?” And they hugged me! I felt so loved.
This was on Wednesday.
Ballgowns and dancers.
Blue and silver sequins.
The clock strikes twelve.
It’s a dream with a time limit.
I’m tired and I’m scared.
All good things can be tainted.
I think I’ll keep my distance.
I don’t dance.
I’m not five
Playing dress up
In my mothers shoes.
Cinderella was a fairytale:
A dream I could never afford.
And they lived
Happily Ever After.
A childhood that I somehow missed,
Because I couldn’t decide what to dress my barbie in.
I’m not five,
But I want to be,
If only I can dance with the prince.
Finding lost imagination is never easy.
(Neither is learning to dance.)
1. “It was a time
where when people talked about one another.”
‘Time’ is not a place. It cannot be a ‘where’ it must be a ‘when.’
2. “It’s a situation
where in which no solution seems possible.”
For this second example, ‘where’ is a little more acceptable, but for it to be absolutely correct ‘in which’ is the way to go.
“Piece of dialogue.” He said.
** Okay, honestly, if you do this in your writing, don’t. Just stop. For your sake as a writer and for all of your readers, avoid it.
The correct way to write that sentence is: “Piece of dialogue,” he said.
Replace your period inside the quotations with a comma and make the capital ‘H’ a lowercase ‘h.’
The sun falls, glowing red.
Red sun, Pink Sky.
The clouds like fire glow
After the rain everything is peaceful*.
*彩虹 means rainbow. I wanted to say it was all peaceful, however, to make it rhyme, my professor changed it to rainbow to make a peaceful setting without actually saying it.
Use “who” not “that” when referring to people.
Ex: He’s the type of student who studies even when he’s in the shower.