Quick Tip 9

Okay not “Ok.”

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Dancing in the Rain

One of my most favorite things is the rain.

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I was jumping around in the puddles in my shoes, singing “Open the flood gates of Heaven! Let it rain!” as it continued to rain harder.

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When I got back to my room, I was dripping little puddles on my floor. I emptied everything out of my back pack, and the only things wet were a receipt and the corners of a journal! (Dude, target knows how to hook a person up.)

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My shoes looked horrible too. They were already dirty, now it looked like I bought them gray. (I’m not even sure I’m the one that bought them….)

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So I threw everything in the washer and drying, and they came out looking like they did before I jumped in any puddles. I, on the other hand, was freezing. I threw on a sweater, and began to clean up the rest of my dirty room.

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(Ignore the fact that I just stated I’m cold so I’m a wearing a sweater, but now I’m also in shorts. I think it’s a Michigan thing.)

The day was a lot of fun. I was wet for nearly all of it. I was definitely soaking wet at the end of it. Although, I did not spare a friend of mine from ending up the same way. A full out water war happened. I was talking to a few other friends, and jokingly said, “Wanna hug?” And they hugged me! I felt so loved.

This was on Wednesday.

I’m Not Cinderella

Vaulted ceilings.

Orchestral music.

Ballgowns and dancers.

Blue and silver sequins.

Glass slippers.

The clock strikes twelve.

It’s a dream with a time limit.

 

I’m tired and I’m scared.

All good things can be tainted.

I think I’ll keep my distance.

I don’t dance.

I’m not five

Playing dress up

In my mothers shoes.

Cinderella was a fairytale:

A dream I could never afford.

 

Wishing wells.

Golden coins.

Kissed frogs.

Lullabies.

Pink tutus.

And they lived

Happily Ever After.

A childhood that I somehow missed,

Because I couldn’t decide what to dress my barbie in.

 

Damn.

I’m not five,

But I want to be,

If only I can dance with the prince.

 

Finding lost imagination is never easy.

(Neither is learning to dance.)

Quick Tip 8

1. “It was a time where when people talked about one another.”
‘Time’ is not a place. It cannot be a ‘where’ it must be a ‘when.’

2. “It’s a situation where in which no solution seems possible.”

For this second example, ‘where’ is a little more acceptable, but for it to be absolutely correct ‘in which’ is the way to go.

Quick Tip 7

“Piece of dialogue.” He said. 

** Okay, honestly, if you do this in your writing, don’t. Just stop. For your sake as a writer and for all of your readers, avoid it. 

The correct way to write that sentence is: “Piece of dialogue,” he said.

Replace your period inside the quotations with a comma and make the capital ‘H’ a lowercase ‘h.’

夕阳 – Sunset

夕阳落,红彤彤

红太阳粉天空。

云彩似火光櫈

雨后天边挂彩虹*。

Translation:

The sun falls, glowing red.

Red sun, Pink Sky.

The clouds like fire glow

After the rain everything is peaceful*.

*彩虹 means rainbow. I wanted to say it was all peaceful, however, to make it rhyme, my professor changed it to rainbow to make a peaceful setting without actually saying it.